申请美国留学文书写作需要注意哪些点

1、学校介绍型
I am an undergraduate in…University,the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.
点评：该同学的PS开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒拒掉。
　　
2、救世主型
I am a problem solver.I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that.Since I was a little boy,a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind,"The world can be changed by man's endeavor,…
点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。美国留学文书的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。
　　
3、重复简历型
I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in…Sciences with a specialization in…in 2002 at…university
点评：不要去重复美国留学申请简历中的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。
　　
4、言幼稚型
'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-''Why the leaves turn red in autumn''How many stars are there in the sky-'When I was in childhood,I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work,I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.
点评：上来就回忆童年少年自己如何有着远大抱负，who cares?个人陈述字数有限，却用这么多话描述童年，没有任何意义。学校想知道你如何看待未来，而不是如何度过过去。
　　
5、抄袭句式型
As a student majoring in Computer Science,I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program.Indeed,having entered this splendid computer world,I am more than greedy for something new.
点评：Odyssey和more than greedy for something new这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。